Mean flow brother, il dice it up and see what I can do for you!

Peace

"I needta get a Mixer and a Pre-amp so I can finally start using my FET microphone (might even get a Pop filter too)"

you need a pop shield, trust me

basically, i think everyone has been through the yeah i want to be a rapper stage when they were kids....

any way, like i said this isn't hate this is criticism, and i haven't got an avatar because i have only just signed up, i will get one i suppose although i don't see the significance. ok here's the low down:

Production:

i think personaly you've thought long and hard about the lyrics, fair play, they may or may not have anything to do with your feelings however that is irrelevant. first things first,

i think you really need to revise your flow. in all honesty can you sit back and listen to your recording and say "F**K YEAH IM HAPPY WITH THAT"?

it just sounds like your reading off the screen in a monotone voice, kind of is if you can't be bothered to do it, what you want is a club banger, you want to imagine yourself in front of a big audience and you have to physically move them with your vocal, if you've written a painful lyric MAKE THEM CRY, if you've written a love song MAKE THEN START SCREWING EACH OTEHR ON THE DANCE FLOOR. lol...

also some of you're lyrics need a bit more care and consideration going into them, i mean some rap isn't about throwing together a bunch of words just because they rhyme...
all i would like to say to you my friend is to research other artists, listen to their key aspects such as their flow and personality and then put that into comparison with yourself, that way you may come to some sort of conclusion.

i understand that you have tried to double track you're vocal like the professionals do, the way i think that you have done it is by getting two of the same recording and layering them almost simutainiously to create a "double tracking effect". this is the wrong way to do it my friend, here's the way to do it,

you record two separate versions of you track, and then chop it up so that the double tracking occurs on the last 3 or so words of each bar, once you have found your flow you can really do some interesting things with double tracking, you could start by looking at harmonics.

Mix down:

i think you're either using a crappy mic and/or it is positioned too close to your computer, their is a lot of background bleed in your recording making the vocals un-useable in a track,

any way, i'd like to end this by saying once more, this isn't hate, this is a little bit of criticism which EVERY producer, engineer, vocalist, musician etc... needs to progress with their work.

i hope this helps you out in some way or another and never give up, good luck

I like it ur flow is unique in its own right i could def envision sum music behind it Keep the goodness flowin man peace

Lol, someone just had to talk smack. With no avatar and what not. I hate when people talk shit and dont give any tracks or anything period to compare your shit to. Random acts of lameness.

this is rough draft you say it sounds decent man good leveling on the vocals too God Bless Keep it Real nice message too