The rest is mine, the vocals sound a bit drowned under everything else - have to fix that later. If you have any advice, thoughts etc. - let me hear! It's definitely an odd song again...
Remastered - did my best bringing out the vocals but the pads have to be put on some other time.
Well this has plenty of atmosphere. Nice layering of the vocals with the big reverb going off all over. It almost has a kind of dub sound to it except with pianos rather than bass.
This is a well chilled track and it compliments the spliff i've just smoked perfectly so cheers for that!
FR
Beautiful intro .. typing as I listen !! moody . nice beat . up the main vocal ? drop the piano or put extreme wide . sax perfect . slight string missing ? lovely flow . bass thump !! here and there ? Love It :) Peace & Light
Very nice SJ. I noticed you used one of my collaborator's loops (Franco,) so I wanted to chime in and give you an "Atta-Girl" for your creation of a very cool, haunting track.
I like this track, man. The feeling makes you want to move... no watch someone else move. I guess you hit the nail on the head with the dance genre here. Keep it up, man.
This is a good track. Tone the piano down a touch, the vocals are fine. Can you add a little bass to carry it along? Up the kick a littl more. I think that some times the percussion could do with some shake or ride just add to the quiet sections with no beat. But that is just my take and in no way reflects on your track. I like it as it is actually and you have done a great job apart from the piano been a tad loud. Well done.
Thanks for your time and all the suggestions to improve this track! I'll try to remaster it when I have acces to a functioning computer again (the old one just crashed).
So glad you liked it this way also - take care!
Thank you for the comment and for listening!
My laptop just crasched yesterday and died completely (or so it seems) and I'm now listening to this with other headphones on an other computer and - oh boy - it all sounds really muddy and not at all the same as before. I guess that's a good thing to discover!
But you are right - nothing can be completely perfect - or if it is, then it looses something else.
The muddiness I have to try to fix, though! =D
About the genre - I really didn't know where to put this, maybe you are right.
Take care!
dear S.J, glad to hear a new track of yours after a while , and byond everything this new track of yours make me ask myself how would be if I become a father someday & can I compose like now & myself or like U ?!?
uuumm...I'm noT sure if I can ...!
oh I speciallY reallY love those SaX loops by FrancO , & U've used them so considered . & those drum lines by our tallented colleague Sprikuval , and as Patrick has told himself too , I also like those pianO too so much . vocal line's voice too was impressive . & totalY U had make a reallY remarkable package .welldone .thnX for sharinG .best wishes.___Behnam
Oh hi Behnam!!
So happy to have you back here with us!
Haha - well I Think you would get yet an other new dimension to your creativity if you become a father so I'm gessing you would sound as You but even more like You. And you already compose magical stuff, so it would be even more magical.
I love the sax too, and the drumloops in this song! And Antranita has a special soulful voice - I just remastered the track to get her voice more infront. I did the pianopart myself although it's only done in FL Studio and is not at all the real thing but maybe some day...
Thanks for listening and for the fav!
I'm so glad to hear from you that I'm fav'in YOU Behnam!
Take care!
This is cool! I like how you've used the vocals! Thanks for incorporating one of my loops! The mix sounds pretty good to me, except I would lower the piano a bit. Awesome track!
Wow sister, you just keep getting better and better!! Just a few tweaks needed to boost this. Steve's right, the song looses momentum around 2.19, then picks up again after the bridge at 2.57. The vox needs a volume boost, but apart from that, you is on to a winner with this one.
Really Good stuff. (and you call me eclectic ;-)) I agree with you on the vocals there is a part where it gets too soft in the mix. But you have created a nice minimalistic sound-scape for these pellas to thrive in. I might think about backing down just a tiny bit on the mix with the piano, and maybe consider using very sparsely a pad (like vickydan uses) softly fading in and out around the 2:20 area, just like a whisper of a hint of ambience. Otherwise I think you have the workings of a great song here, I'm impressed!
Steve
Haha - yes one might call this eclectic. ;)
Yet, listening to it after one nights sleep I find the melody too monotonous, too much piano - should have been some other instruments playing the same melody somehow...or something completely different, to keep the interest.
I seem always to think a song is finished when it really isn't!
Well anyway - thank you, Steve, for your REALLY encouraging words and the advice with volume and pads! I'll look in to that.
Have a nice day!
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This is a well chilled track and it compliments the spliff i've just smoked perfectly so cheers for that!
FR
Take care =)
Cheers,
Scott
I will.
Reminds me of Nelly Furtado, just a little... I don't know why.
I really like your song! :D
That made me very glad to hear.
Take care!
So glad you liked it this way also - take care!
For me it's going in my Chillout file, as i found it real chilled more than Dance,but thats just my personal liking!
Great use of loops,I can tell your working hard to refine things,so dont worry as its sounding great.!
The main thing is the enjoyment you get,and not always how perfect music has to sound.!
No Track is perfect ever even for famous artist's,
as music is never static.
It breaths what ever life you put in to it.!.
Good Track man!
My laptop just crasched yesterday and died completely (or so it seems) and I'm now listening to this with other headphones on an other computer and - oh boy - it all sounds really muddy and not at all the same as before. I guess that's a good thing to discover!
But you are right - nothing can be completely perfect - or if it is, then it looses something else.
The muddiness I have to try to fix, though! =D
About the genre - I really didn't know where to put this, maybe you are right.
Take care!
uuumm...I'm noT sure if I can ...!
oh I speciallY reallY love those SaX loops by FrancO , & U've used them so considered . & those drum lines by our tallented colleague Sprikuval , and as Patrick has told himself too , I also like those pianO too so much . vocal line's voice too was impressive . & totalY U had make a reallY remarkable package .welldone .thnX for sharinG .best wishes.___Behnam
So happy to have you back here with us!
Haha - well I Think you would get yet an other new dimension to your creativity if you become a father so I'm gessing you would sound as You but even more like You. And you already compose magical stuff, so it would be even more magical.
I love the sax too, and the drumloops in this song! And Antranita has a special soulful voice - I just remastered the track to get her voice more infront. I did the pianopart myself although it's only done in FL Studio and is not at all the real thing but maybe some day...
Thanks for listening and for the fav!
I'm so glad to hear from you that I'm fav'in YOU Behnam!
Take care!
Very good: I second Steve's suggestion.
And I am looking forward to hearing the new version: this stuff is good!
Fav'ed
Domenico
Makes it worth the hole thing, actually.
Have a nice day, Domenico!
Thanks for the loop and for listening!
Have a nice day!
=)
K;)
I'll look in to that.
And hope the improvement continues considering I started at the very bottom not long ago. =D
Steve
Yet, listening to it after one nights sleep I find the melody too monotonous, too much piano - should have been some other instruments playing the same melody somehow...or something completely different, to keep the interest.
I seem always to think a song is finished when it really isn't!
Well anyway - thank you, Steve, for your REALLY encouraging words and the advice with volume and pads! I'll look in to that.
Have a nice day!