Description : My first song of 2014. Only a demo. I'm still working finalizing and remastering. What do you all think? Enjoy~
Edit: 2014-09-15 Track is complete and fully corrected from demo. Enjoy!
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hi,
really nice work overall... but still I encourage you to find some better piano plugin - this could help this main modal progression of notes to correspond better with the bass, upper (and dark lower) strings, and saxophone melodic line in here. I am just suggest you to maybe experiment a bit, rework it and maybe to find some resonance of the piano progression... I mean some proper chords and bassline.
I have an impression that those layers clash sometimes along the track and there is no proper let's say 'proper chord progression' in there.
But still this is only my vision - the song sounds really nice so far and I am enjoying it a lot. Keep it up!
Alex
Alright. I'll keep that in mind for next time I work on a track like that. I appreciate it. I'll be on the lookout for some good/better quality pianos. Thanks again!
Hi. Lots of good stuff here though quite a few problems too so hope you don't mind if I point them out.
Intro piano has quite a bit of noise on it. Not sure why that is. Maybe there's a synth underneath. If so, the main thing audible is the noise.
0:15-0:16 there's an awkward jump.
This is quite cinematic stuff. Sure, bit of an r'n'b beat and drum sound but I'd say it's quite cinematic otherwise.
Bass is very effective when it comes in. Very solid tone.
1:38 and the track iss getting deeper with that new synth wind instrument.
I've said it before so sort of feel slightly bad for saying it again but quite a few of your synth sounds really let the track down.
I'm sure this is just because you're working with all you've got. But your stuff would sound much better with better string/wind instrument samples.
I guess this means spending some money and I also suppose you're only young and are still very much learning and are only going to get better.
I say these things as hopefully helpful advice rather than just talking about what was good, which might leave you thinking these sounds are good enough when I don't think they are. That's not your fault and I assure you I used to use worse sounds. Until I got better ones and then went back and replaced those inferior sounds.
Hope that makes sense as I feel your compositional abilities would be better represented with better tools (sounds).
As always, I appreciate your wisdom and your critiquing. I will have the final project posted soon. Perhaps that'll be much better than this version here. Thanks!
Great start and build, this is a really good base for what could be a great track, the drum is a bit too loud but can be easily sorted. As Danke says a vocals would make this an absolute winner.
Best wishes,
Mark/Larry!
It could be a super song...hope, you plan vocs on it, as I hear about the building of the song...already, there are places for vocs...female voice maybe?
In this demo version there is a bit oveergaining (maybe the kick) in my headphones...
Best, Danke
I will absolutely keep that in mind, my friend! I appreciate your recommendations. Also, I shall fix the kick, for it does seem overbearing now that you mention it.
~Ookami
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really nice work overall... but still I encourage you to find some better piano plugin - this could help this main modal progression of notes to correspond better with the bass, upper (and dark lower) strings, and saxophone melodic line in here. I am just suggest you to maybe experiment a bit, rework it and maybe to find some resonance of the piano progression... I mean some proper chords and bassline.
I have an impression that those layers clash sometimes along the track and there is no proper let's say 'proper chord progression' in there.
But still this is only my vision - the song sounds really nice so far and I am enjoying it a lot. Keep it up!
Alex
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Intro piano has quite a bit of noise on it. Not sure why that is. Maybe there's a synth underneath. If so, the main thing audible is the noise.
0:15-0:16 there's an awkward jump.
This is quite cinematic stuff. Sure, bit of an r'n'b beat and drum sound but I'd say it's quite cinematic otherwise.
Bass is very effective when it comes in. Very solid tone.
1:38 and the track iss getting deeper with that new synth wind instrument.
I've said it before so sort of feel slightly bad for saying it again but quite a few of your synth sounds really let the track down.
I'm sure this is just because you're working with all you've got. But your stuff would sound much better with better string/wind instrument samples.
I guess this means spending some money and I also suppose you're only young and are still very much learning and are only going to get better.
I say these things as hopefully helpful advice rather than just talking about what was good, which might leave you thinking these sounds are good enough when I don't think they are. That's not your fault and I assure you I used to use worse sounds. Until I got better ones and then went back and replaced those inferior sounds.
Hope that makes sense as I feel your compositional abilities would be better represented with better tools (sounds).
~Ookami
~Ookami
Best wishes,
Mark/Larry!
~Ookami
In this demo version there is a bit oveergaining (maybe the kick) in my headphones...
Best, Danke
~Ookami