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15th Oct 2014 05:35 - 10 years ago
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Description : Unfinished track I'm working on, based off of Danke's "Black Roses" piano loop. Looking for a collab! I'm looking to go in a Rock meets Electronic or Dubstep direction, but I'm open to ideas. I have lyrics for a bridge, but it doesn't sound right with just a piano. I need amped up instrumentals. I really want to bring the pre-chorus ("everybody, c'mon, everybody") back at the end, but up an octave up in a belt with some heavy guitars possibly? I really want to amp up this song. Please excuse the piano in the chorus. It's not as beautiful as Danke's arrangement but I needed a change in chords. The song is in E minor by the way. Tempo=

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If you have time take a listen and give AxelStPatience some feedback.

promenade2239
promenade2239 20th Nov 2014 13:11 - 10 years ago
your vocals are great here. Maybe I might help you with this project, I have far too much music going on at the moment though... Anyway I agree with comments below and think you should just stay with the acoustic sound-image - so even more piano, some drums and strings or soft pads that in my opinion will 'amp up' this song. Again the vocals are super nice as is your piano playing.
I will send you a message. Alex
GramoChopin
GramoChopin 20th Nov 2014 02:39 - 10 years ago
I think it sounds pretty damn amazing with just the piano. I didn't have much of a problem with the vocals. They fit the vibe of the song nicely. It could use a dubstep remix....but I love the piano as instrument so much that I think that might ruin it.

For me at least. Didn't see much wrong with it as a piece alone, it could fit for a transition into the dubstep remix next instead. As if it was a mix or part of a collection. An intro track.

But I really dig this though man, has a real somber chilled out mood. Great job, peace

Gramo/Neo
EazyBeatz
EazyBeatz 20th Nov 2014 02:10 - 10 years ago
Hi there AxelStPatience , EazyBeatz here :) just wanted to let you know you have my attention! I usually don't listen to projects with vocals but every now and then I tend check one or two out. I'm glad I pressed play on this one! N by the way, u are an amazing singer! Great job on this one. I also would like to ask if you wouldn't mind if i tried giving it a lil EazyBeatz flavor on this track. Would U let me?? if not its ok I'd understand . Take care, much love -EazyBeatz :)
soundhound
soundhound 20th Nov 2014 00:23 - 10 years ago
Very nice track vocal was done with taste and has a style...Nice...
I'm sure there will be a few that will jump on this...

Solid piece of work...

Peace...TG.
Burtsbluesboxes
Burtsbluesboxes 15th Oct 2014 20:02 - 10 years ago
This is really good :D I like the direction this is going. I could hear some orchestral instruments like strings, and distorted electric guitar behind the piano where it intensifies then lets you back down with nice soft singing and the piano alone, I'm also working with Danke's Black Roses loop, among a few others. :D
Danke
Danke 15th Oct 2014 11:18 - 10 years ago
Hi Austin!

This could be a superb number...

Overall, I agree with Evan to put some orchestration into the song...plus I imagine acoustic and bass guitars but I don't think distorted guitars could be a good choice...your voice and that instrument's tone are far away from each other...

The chorus is brilliant (I mean the piano)
What does your voice looks like when you sing harder?
Did you try it before?

Respect, Danke
Evisma
Evisma 15th Oct 2014 06:02 - 10 years ago
"I really want to amp up this song"

I think a big part of that would be to put more emotion in your vocals. You sing like there is someone in the next room and you don't want them to hear you. Like you're being quiet.

It also sounded like your first vocal line kind of ascends, but the root notes of the piano do not. The word "Are" seems to go up, when it sounds like it shouldn't based on the piano. Same for each starting line of the stanzas.

What I think this track needs is some orchestral strings. Lots. That is what I was hearing more than guitars. The vocals never get hard or even very excited to be there. You have a good lyrical idea, the delivery is just lackadaisical.

"Please excuse the piano in the chorus"

I thought that part sounded good. A tone and key change.

Evan
AxelStPatience
AxelStPatience replied 15th Oct 2014 - 10 years ago
That's just how I sing, I'm afraid. I feel like there's some kind of miscommunication about what it is you think I want for this song. The thing that drew me to the original piano loop was the certain degree of dissonance. The song itself is about dissonance in a world that doesn't understand. I just have a really solid idea in my head about the direction this needs to go, but thank you for your feedback.

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