I like this. Only flaw I think would be the drums. Kind of bland. Everything else it good. You've definitely got something.

nice, what DAW did u get? i agree with the other comments. personally i think that high pitch percussion is a touch high - perhaps eq that. Is that a crackle i hear at the end? on purpose? if not sometimes it means Ive reverb on too many tracks for my laptop to handle. A trick is to disable the fx etc while recording that track that is crackling, this takes a bit of pressure of the pc while the track is recorded clean. I like this kind of music but its not my first choice so this next suggestion is from a naive perspective. I think it needs something analogue or something added. Perhaps an acapella from here or a live instrument. If u would like some improvised guitar over it, message me via my profile and I can lay something over this - it has a sound that inspires me.

Wow, not bad! You're much better than many producers I've met back home. You definitely have a knack for this. The mixing is tastefully done. Though I wouldn't say this falls into the "Dance" genre (maybe Trance?), it definitely sounds pretty good; please don't take that lightly :)

ER

Hey, this is a very interesting style! It is a bit slower than most dance which I would dance to or create, but I can appreciate it for what it is. I like the mixing, especially considering you are new to the DAW thing. Definitely think that you should keep going with your efforts, as this has something special about it. Thank you for sharing.