Very catchy bass line here. This would have sounded as good as an instrumental, with some little tweeks here and there as Spudsy has mentioned. Definately has potential! Nice work here anyways!

The opening was almost identical to a tune I used to play back in the 90's, although I can't remember the name of it, so this brought back a few memories.

In fact, if I heard this in an 'old skool' mix, I wouldn't bat an eyelid.

Thanks for sharing.

the bass line is fine for the genre (if your going for the garage type deep house vibe) although the drums seem to have a very strange structure. Parts dropping in and out at will. One moment you have the hats then 16 later they are out then 16 later they are back in? its very jarring and is causing the track to not flow correctly. Also makes the whole track sound like its been made with building blocks. Try making another copy of the bass in a higher octave, and put it after the second break down, low in the mix with some ping pong delay and reverb to ad an extra layer.

Drum roles, white noise risers and falls, FX... all these things are your friend in making the transitions between parts less stale.

Thanks for sharing