Nice poem, man.

The beat fits the mood of your words and the effects on your voice are good. Even though they are too prominent in some parts. But that's still ok ;)

Really good poetry man! Nice production too! I like the effects you used on the vocals! Those beats suit this poem very nicely! Well done man!

As a poet, I appreciate your expression. As a producer, there's one problem that can't be ignored. There are no words spoken until :35 into a 4:44 long track. :35 is enough time for listeners to get annoyed and switch to another track. It's also enough time for a listener to leave you alone altogether. You wouldn't stand on stage silent for :35. Don't let a track play for that long before letting loose. Other than that, I enjoyed it. However, I appreciate the art and understand the effort put forth. The average listener doesn't care about any of that. They want satisfaction.

Man I am really feelin this track. "I pray that our GOd lightins the sky" Feelin' that line right there. And hte beat matches the toneof the piece perfetly. I've lsitened to some of your other stuff too dude. Your a great writer. Ir would be realy cool to collaborate with you, so if you have any projects your working on hit meup id like to see if i could lend my vocals