My favorite part is 1:52-2:13. In my opinion you should add a snare into the beat on the verses. The breakdowns are great, and then there's that feeling that it should land on the snare on a tight beat on the verses. It might need to come down in volume as well, the track as a whole. Who am I to talk, I end up mixing loud half the time. Good work!
Not bad. The beat was pretty unique. I enjoyed it. Your vocals are still super muffled and hard to hear. If your going with that lo-fi sound, thats fine, i would perhaps boost some high end frequencies in the E.Q. to bring out some clarity.
Also from a rap perspective, the flow is fine, but the delivery could use some work. Delivery aka how you deliver your rap. Kinda one-tone, and doesnt change at all throughout the song. Just a couple things to think about! Hit me up if you want further assistance! Keep it up
gewd stuff,much appreciated,, i went back nd(methinks) did all that,m thinkin it at least cleared up the vocals,,
but you're totally right about the flow,,kinda boring,,bousta hyu
Yeah man, so much better than before, but there are further improvement you still can do. For example, it is still hard to understand the verses you declare, and, once again, the low frequencies of the voice are still too strong. Very nice the transceiver effect, however it still makes the lyrics unintelligible. Try this: insert the (same) vocal track on multiple patterns in the rack, for each of these apply different filters, enhancing the mid-high frequencies and cutting off the low ones. Then play them all together and in the mixer you can adjust the volumes on each track, until you find a better sound! If you don't want to do it on the entire song, you can treat the voice within another project, when you're satisfied with the result, export, then add it to the instrumental.
The lyrics are pretty good, and flows not bad for your first song ever. Obviously the quality of the song is pretty rough, but that will come in time. Your vocals are muffled. Sounds like you need a new condenser mic. But keep me in mind if you need an engineer to mix and master your tracks. Shoot me an email. Peace and keep it up
Totally agree with Alien! I really like the music, the final mix/mastering... something to fix. Maybe you got no money for a mic, but for sure you can apply fix and tricks on vocals before put on mix, do you? My tip: add a filter to cut the lowest frequencies (your voice is too low), then add a 4:1 compression (to balance the waveform) then add a dynamic volume envelopment all the track long (to make the vocal track more intelligible and to ensure that it does not bury or be buried by the music in the background) and, optional, some weird effect (like the one used all the vocals long in "Your Woman" by White Town.)
Goodluck! I've been doing this for 8 years Haha! I've had learned all this on my own so it took me a bit longer. Wish I would had gone to school for music.
Really cool track, i don't know how to translate it but in french we call it "un tambour roulant", it usually used in the military walk and i liked the render is this track!
:25 second mark i can hear a melody thats getting washed away from the distorted bass going on, some eq to balance things and some more drum sculpting to get rid of rigidity and it would be sick
Mice piano melody & I like the "big drum" sound in it. Definitely has a kind of quirky old world sound. Like the last days of the Czar kind of a thing. Great work.
we have Rasmus Ryberg Andersen to thank for the piano,gewd sir,,'ve loved it since theaters,,the original's 'only' piano,jus tried to make sumpthin awesome for it
glad ya dug it,,!much appreciated (your current featured is killer,by the by,,gotta check out more'a your stoof
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Very nice work I like it.
Vocal is nice too.
Well done.
Jamid
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Also from a rap perspective, the flow is fine, but the delivery could use some work. Delivery aka how you deliver your rap. Kinda one-tone, and doesnt change at all throughout the song. Just a couple things to think about! Hit me up if you want further assistance! Keep it up
but you're totally right about the flow,,kinda boring,,bousta hyu
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Well done.
Jamid
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Really cool track, i don't know how to translate it but in french we call it "un tambour roulant", it usually used in the military walk and i liked the render is this track!
Nice work
Bleep
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love the violins that came in
keep it up
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glad ya dug it,,!much appreciated (your current featured is killer,by the by,,gotta check out more'a your stoof