I actually think a pretty good job. Definitely better than I could. Your vocals actually remind me of Weird Al Yankovic in a way and I mean that in the best possible way.
You're way too kind. Thanks for the kind words though. I definitely have some work to do on this one--soon. I liked the idea of putting my prison pen pal's letters into song though; just need to do a better job here.
Nice improvements, I like the echo on the guitar. I agree with John about adding some effects to the vocals like a little reverb, just to set it in the mix better. A itte reverb on the drums might sound good too. I'll admit that mixing is tough but you are getting there, sounds better, wel done!
Thanks! I'll try more effects on the vocals / drums. I'm definitely still getting a feel for how to mix correctly. Lots of trial and error. I'm not very comfortable with my voice, so I've got some work to do there.
Great track. Have you though about adding some effects to your voice to give it a bit of errieness to go alomg with the subject matter of the song??? Just a thought :-) Great guitar work, btw.
Thanks for the comments on my guitar work. It's the first original song I've worked on, in terms of guitar, in 10 years. Far too long to be away from songcrafting with the guitar. So, your words are encouraging.
I gotta say that you really have something there. Has a great "Garage"ey feel to it.. I agree with the others about thickening it up, but that will come with experience. this is another track that I would really love to get my grubby little Hands on.. You're starting out with a great song, so it can only get better. The three esteemed gents who reviewed before me don't lie, and they wouldn't tell you to waste your time polishing this if it wasn't worth it..
I will check on this one periodically because it has a great feel and I'd like to see how it progresses.
Wow. Thank you! It really means a lot to me that people liked this track. It's one of my favorites that I've done--I'm doing a whole EP of rock songs with lyrics based around a fantasy fiction novel I'm writing.
I actually did "remaster" the track followed everyone's great advice. I'll be uploading it tonight. Is there any way that I can alert all of you to the new file? I'd like to hear what you think of the changes.
I agree with humps about doubling the rhythm guitar, I would also add that on the one side you could change the octave of the guitar. Gives a three dimensional sound.
In any case, the track is bloody awesome as it is.
Thanks so much for the review! I'm going to revisit this song very soon to try the doubling and the octave switch. I'm going to play around and see what I come up with. Thanks so much for the encouragement!
So how do you like the new guitar? PRS, nice! Not a bad listen man, great job singing, nice story.
You might want to try to double the rhythm guitar track and pan them left and right, it will fill the space better and your vocals will sit in the mix better and the bass will stand out more too. Also try adding some stereo widening to the tracks, they will sound fatter and thicker if you open them up a bit.
Excellent advice. I'm going to try everything you've just mentioned. I'm new to this game, so any tips are greatly appreciated.
As for the guitar--honestly, I'm in love with it. I've always had cheap $150 guitars. Now that I have this one--which wasn't astronomical but is definitely of better quality--I can see a huge difference in tone and the way I can access the fret board.
Should rename "Zombie Meat War"LOL. I really think you're sick for this one, I mean just plain stupid. But it's all good just put in favs so "Keep'em comin & Keep'em movin".
Lol this was awesome, I actually like the beat and the synths were cool...a few more synths and this could be even better! This sounds more like a dance track to me, hilarious lyrics, cool track!
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I have to agree the vocal sounds a bit dry compared to the fuller mix, but you're def. heading in the right direction..
The Goose.
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I think the tracks is great.
Faved and downloaded
John
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Wayne
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Faved and downloaded
John
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John
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I will check on this one periodically because it has a great feel and I'd like to see how it progresses.
well done,
The Goose.
Wow. Thank you! It really means a lot to me that people liked this track. It's one of my favorites that I've done--I'm doing a whole EP of rock songs with lyrics based around a fantasy fiction novel I'm writing.
I actually did "remaster" the track followed everyone's great advice. I'll be uploading it tonight. Is there any way that I can alert all of you to the new file? I'd like to hear what you think of the changes.
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Thanks for the kind words. It's was a fun song to do. I'm looking forward to doing the next one this week (I do one a week).
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In any case, the track is bloody awesome as it is.
Love it
Faved
John
Thanks so much for the review! I'm going to revisit this song very soon to try the doubling and the octave switch. I'm going to play around and see what I come up with. Thanks so much for the encouragement!
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You might want to try to double the rhythm guitar track and pan them left and right, it will fill the space better and your vocals will sit in the mix better and the bass will stand out more too. Also try adding some stereo widening to the tracks, they will sound fatter and thicker if you open them up a bit.
Cheers,
Wayne
Excellent advice. I'm going to try everything you've just mentioned. I'm new to this game, so any tips are greatly appreciated.
As for the guitar--honestly, I'm in love with it. I've always had cheap $150 guitars. Now that I have this one--which wasn't astronomical but is definitely of better quality--I can see a huge difference in tone and the way I can access the fret board.
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-David
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but as far as putting letters sent to you as rap
its not working for me - maybe if a real person with feeling could do it or tweak it.
as the vocal work here is dry as someone learning to read for the first time.