LightAs1Feather

my friend for sure it was best I've ever heared from U.
very welldone about instrumental execution & Vocal both .lighT your voice is more capable than main singer & this great ability ability is sensible in your cover version! just seems U've recorded vocal in one take or two take and because of breathing your voice has dwindled in 2 last sentence.by the way Attila is right in previous comment it was ancient power.best wishes,___Behnam

Hahh...no comments?

Ancient power what I hear in this cover...both the vocs and the instrus...for me is a winner attitude...
I like this song from both of you...
Best, Danke

dear LighT ,I just wanted to say, as I told U no doubt it has great potential , and just if U can correct some ntoes which are not exactly tuned , this would be more awesome . meanwhile , I want to say thanX for made me remember Omo ( Soluna ) that lovely and humbled man whose absence is a pitty in these recetly months here between us .else and beside, light I don't know if U may know or noT , buT as I know ,dear Omo has a tape Album with his friends which name is "Spass by Saite" . not sure if this track is in that album too or noT ( buT as I remember I think no ),buT this one too is a really beautifull one ...totally Soluna was a phenomen as a musician I think ...thnx for sharing this and best wishes.___Behnam

Awesome idea and work. Like your track description and i can relate to it. Yes, engineers would call it laying down the 'scratch' vocal so that the singer who sings the eventual track has a rough idea of what to do. All my tracks are just that 'scratch vocal' but i prefer to call them spoken word. Blessings to you. - Mr.B

This is nice. You have a powerful, dramatic voice, very fitting with the music I think. I like! :)

Interesting story. The lyrics got my thoughts painting the scenes to this movie. Creative and attractive approach. I really don't hear much of any problems except for what NWG mentioned about the vocal range on some of the notes your singing . For example around 0:19 into the song where you say "Action behind the camera" if you sang "Behind" like you do "Camera" I think might smooth out the feeling of whats being sung because "behind" doesn't sound in tune with music like "camera" sounds just my opinion. For the most part your voice fits the feeling of the music and it holds interest locked in. I did like the expressive direction with the vocals. Good use of Solunas instrumental and thank you for sharing. Peace.

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Amazing Track :) Voice is amazing I Also Need Some Vocals for some of my tracks for progressive house genre :)

Nice work. ^____^

Wow! I liked it so nice I listened twice! I love your voice - in fact you're making me pant! :-P Wanna get married? Haha! That all said, I do hafta critique you a little - you seem to have slightly exceeded your vocal range on a note or two here and there. Work it a little bit - maybe double track some of the more challenging part. Overall sweet. Better than my singing, that's for sure. :-)

NWG

not sure if guitar and vocal matches ! but i liked melody and can find something for it and we both can sing . do you collab?

Glad to see U again after a while dear colleague , well ,I listened & liked it & know U compose yourself lyriX & I've admired U because of your lyrix before too but according to I had listened to all yourtrax(but one) if U may remember(just I've changed avatar),I should say U have thrived in every respects about gaining controle to your voice in this 2months in which U've been absent here .also seems something has been added to U in deep inside cause U sing by all your hearth this track even more than your previous traX,and those are all worthy of adoration.best wishes.___Behnam.

Well you beat me on the high notes lol

I really liked that,i found myself singing along with you,but your much better than me,so i just meeowwd alot lol

As long as you enjoy what your doing,then i have no complaints,as i thought is was lovely!

I love this song and you did it proud. You have a really strong voice, but you need to learn how to control it and that just comes with practice.

There's a thing called tone deaf, where your voice sounds great to you, but not to everyone else. You DON'T have that, but your voice does go flat in places, so work on those places.

Take in the criticism, listen to it or don't, but never, never let it bring you down and never, never, stop what you are doing. You have a great talent.

Am I plugging a book here?!?

Kenny

This is a really nice track, full of warmth and love. Yes the vocals are off in places, but that can be fixed. You need to run through it a couple of times, before you record the vocals. Then get one track down. If you don't like it, but the timing is good, keep it, mute it and record it again.

Sheeeet that almost sounded like I know what I'm talking about!!

Really great piece of work, thanx for sharing.

holy cow, benham is a scientist - dam i respect that! this poor listener is just left watching spoons bend and flowers springing from the ice - now that's not a good technical review but i remain your second candle

well, It's Second track which I've listened to from you .
your Improvement is undeniable , & I'm listening to your more dominance while singing .your sound is more impressive in this track & such Notation & chords ,& I guess some reverb could smooth & add a gloss on your voice which seems forgotten & your voice has not enough reverb .
your improvement rate is admirable ,I mean if you enumerate your mistake rate in this one ,you'll see false moments have decreased to 1.4 than your first track rate ,& obviously more solfeggio trainings will solve such thnigs as soon as you can't believe . & else in the end I wanna tell you I enjoyed your text & your harmonized notes for singing your words in accompaniment of music notes & beats & your proper & good selected notes to harmonized vocal melody & Instrumental chordation were one of the most important reasons which made me to listen your track from first till ending . & think you should appreciate such a melodist mind in yourself brain & pay attention your tallents & skills balance . just may I know if you (yourself) write this lyrics or not ? by the way may I know How do you practice to sing ?have you ever test any machine vocal to sing your harmonized melody instead of your sound before singing & record it ?
+appologize for such long commenting,regards & best wishes.
_Behnam

I can imagine this young girl you sing of. Lost in a world of uncertain certainty. I can see how feelings can bend reality to a certain degree that makes us believe in things that we deny our gut instincts. This piece has a moving picture. While trapped in a fantasy reality is kicking up dust then clears for a different view. What I heard is a very interesting story sure many out there could relate in some way. Chin up feet forward and thanks for sharing with us. Take care.

well it's the first track which I've listened to from you (random but honestly I should say your avatar was the reason because of my own avatar ! & I was curious to hear a male vocal when I heard a young girl was singing )

= aobut lyrics: I think it was an innovative storyteller song ,more advanced than a college student normal perception .

= about Vocal & singing style : I think it was a tallented voice , capable larynx which shall know better about music theories,tonality in harmony & notation tune ,to never gone false & get a better performance number in performance evalution , but undeniable the larynx ability could get a good number in potentio meter .

& about vocal melody ( melody notation as a separate opinion & harmonize pursuant Instrumental version ):
I listened to a heartfull melody which was in a harmony & proper for Instrumental version from (Quavor) , it's hard work U'd done & have such a set melody line , pursuant the instrumental version .& I think it was good .

my appologize for such a long commenting .
Regards

_BehnaM

a devastating track - so many are damaged by love/hate user-based relationships - this is a horrible and sympathetic scene - powerful and dark verities - how does brightness become so degraded? a grim and soulful exploration that is artless and naked in the best sense of musical expressionism.
also, while i am certainly no producer, the sound qualities are chilling and 3D.
bravos, sister

hello. i am moved beyond words and glad to meet you. you have brought such a supple wisdom and real kindness to this. i don't think this music existed until you sung = what an honour to play alongside you, sister.