you have a nice voice that is very workable. your choice of sounds is also interesting. i would use more modern sounding drums and make the chorus stand out more from the verse.
i don't mean to be harsh in any way just constructive, but here goes. i can tell you put a lot of value into your other tracks but i like the quick rap best. i wanted more. your voice is very sexy when you talk. tonally your singing is correct. but on the others you dont push enough air and you dont succeed in making me believe in you. find the most horrific thing you can thats happened in your life and put that to your next vocal piece using metaphors ofcourse. bleed the vocal track, dont just sing it.
nice work. sometimes artists here make electronica for electronicas sake. some make it with the intentions of vocals and potential air play. your is set up perfectly for vocals and airplay. nice job.
your stuff is top notch. id love to have your permission to add vocals. i see this being a song about how we as a species have used mother earth for almost all we can and she wants to continue to feed and clothe us but we are angry, lost, wasteful children who worry to much about fortune and too little about what's really important. in arctica there is life at 30 deg f below zero. in volcanic underses there is life. why is it so resilient and why do we not care more to preserve it? that is what id like to address unless you have lyrics ofcourse. your stuff is awesome.
id like your permission to add vocals. if you already have lyrics great. if you want to do vocals yourself i totally understand. this could be a psych furs hit.
very close to something really good. usally i would never have to say this in hip hop but i think the base drum kick could be louder. and as i reviewed another rapper earlier, not only dont be afraid of a true sing along chorus but embrace a hook. jz understands the power of a hook. you have got me on the edge. reel me in with a sing along powerful chorus possibly with a soulfull female or male voice.
i thought immediately of the band live as well which i love. vocals are mixed a little low in the verse. nice work on doubling at the end. you need to push more air when singing and anunciate better on the words especially when the meaning is so important. sing it like you mean it. the melody and chorus are raw but have good potential. personally id love to rerecord it in a professional studio.
Thank you much for the insightful review. I badly want to get a chance soon to re-take everything, especially the vocals! A shot redoing this song in a pro studio would be incredible. This was done on a VERY basic system with Sonar 4.
really good work. it reminds of how rap experimented with horror rap for awhile but never caught on. maybe because the orchestrated sound should have been more like this>>>>>>
if i was a rapper i would rework the ending and middle a little and release it right away. this would set someone apart with their own sound. kinda reminds me of when p diddy redid kashmir.
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if i was a rapper i would rework the ending and middle a little and release it right away. this would set someone apart with their own sound. kinda reminds me of when p diddy redid kashmir.