Really diggin this song. If you like the girl, you should put a ring on it ;-) Sex just gets better with time, if you are willing to let eachother grow and learn through life's stages. Marriage really rocks (in my mid twenties, been married for 5 years now)
Drawn in right away. I think you should cut out the drum "metronome" at the beginning and just launch in right at 4 seconds. I really like how this has some different sections for a vocalist, because the drumline starts to get a bit repetitive until 48 seconds. The transition from the regular drumline to the new one at 48 seconds and also the one at 2:12 threw me off a bit- like it didn't quite fall on time...maybe this is an acquired taste. Between 1:51 and 1:52 it delays just a bit and some parts following. Love the guitar at 2:27- wanna hear more of that throughout, with more variation.
Since this is still in progress, I encourage you to play around more with the guitar side of things.
This track is awesome, I was totally making up lyrics to it as I listened and felt some Nirvana in there. Get wild with it, break away from the pattern of the drums a bit more and let your inner rocker out!! This track is well on its way!! Could easily hear a finished product with some lyrics on the rock radio station.
In my opinion, vocally, the transitions at 48 seconds and 2:12 could use some whispered lyrics. Some of the chorus spots could use some ambient yelling or screams.
I'm glad your liking what I have so far, and thanks so much for listening and checking it out, and yea I'm still messing around with this song, thanks for the feedback, first person to ever give detailed criticism that's quite helpful lol and yea I agree with you on the feedback, I have to keeping working on it. Drums are pretty repetitive hah man I need to get new drum sticks mine broke just recently .
This would work great in the cinematic genre, though of course we have no idea what the rest of it will sound like. Really loving the depth of sound here, very professional, and has the right tones and vibe to inspire and create a mood. Has a tribal element, which I personally find sexy. Bravo!!! Beautiful work!!
I am totally impressed by how innovative the musical composition is on this!! I am not as impressed with my vocals on it or the way it was placed. I think you should get rid of them as it takes away from the music! It doesn't quite fit the mood I feel. Loving the sounds on this wow!
I am sorry that you don't feel like your vocals fit in there just right, I have a tendency to be that way to make things that don't seem just quite right co-exist.
If you insist I will post redo the track without the vocals but I actually do like it, maybe it is a sign of how we tend to be our own biggest critics.
Love how you chopped this vocal up as another instrument in the overall composition, rather than just laying the original over as is. Also enjoyed the musical setting. I wonder how much more this could expand if you pulled from other pella as well, using the same creative approach to decorate the track.
Thanks for the warm words. I try to give my best, but this is just a demo track. Could be nice if you can upload more "I wish" vocals. Then the song would be complete.
Wow you get better and better everytime I hear you! Way to go! This flows like gold, spectacular!! Not enough good things to say about it. You own this genre!
hi! I enjoyed this, well done for the electro genre and even more surprising given your age. You have a good ear for volume levels and I was really impressed by the different elements you tucked into this, to avoid the repetition. Excited to hear more of your work!
Majestic? Nobody has ever used that word to describe one of my songs, now I'm feeling pretty good about myself, lol!! Thanks for checking it out and using the word majestic. ;) Glad you liked it enough to dl it.
I'm very impressed with how radio ready this sounds. I feel the music is just a tad too loud for her vocals or her vocals need another layer to not be drowned out (I don't have headphones on so just on my comp speakers this is is how it seems). Other than that, this flows exactly how you'd hear a popular pop song sound today! 5 star!!!
I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! I definitely was aiming for something more like a radio sound so I'm happy to hear it worked out! The vocals could definitely be tweaked now that you mention it. Thank you for leaving feedback!
Don't expect to be blown away? I actually quite enjoyed this! It's one of the only pieces on here today that has made me mildly interesting in singing again (I've combed through a ton!). I am wearing skull candy earphones, but I heard earphones aren't the best anyway. Definitely has potential. Doesn't have any great surprises, but has this underlying sexy chill vibe. Your bass and low vibes really made this. Made by yourself? That's awesome! I'm curious to hear what else you have up your sleeve and who your influences are.
First of all, thank you for the positive feedback I've been out of the music scene for a while. My main inspiration for this track was Deadmau5. I was going for simplistic and chilled with a few instrumentals here and there. I use earphones because I live in a area with a series of apartments close together so I can't play music loud. Yes earphones are not the ideal thing to use for music production although you have to switch between the two mediums to get the song to sound just right. The entire song was done by myself from the composition to the final mastering. I'll be working on a few new tracks and will let you know as soon as they are up on the site.
Wow this packs a powerful punch!! I love writenow and your musical composition is hella amazing and crystal clear. I would have liked to see you link WriteNow's profile, so I'll do it for you: https://www.looperman.com/tracks/detail/148431
If I can ever finish the one I'm working on of yours right now (getting frustrated by the acoustics of the room changing with my move and feeling limited on effects), I would love the honor of recording over more of your work. I hope I am improving to some degree to be worthy enough to add (and not take away) from your art.
Always enjoy reading what emotions you feel when you make a song, because this helps in creating lyrics. I have never heard an average track from you Bruno, your work is always the best.
I don't mix well or know audio from a professional standpoint- but some parts of this sounds muddy and might be peaking a bit, distorting the sound. Distorting can be a cool trick, if used in moderation. However, it can also aggravate the ears when used too much. I like the idea and "skeleton"/ framework here, I'd love to hear a cleaned up version.
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Since this is still in progress, I encourage you to play around more with the guitar side of things.
This track is awesome, I was totally making up lyrics to it as I listened and felt some Nirvana in there. Get wild with it, break away from the pattern of the drums a bit more and let your inner rocker out!! This track is well on its way!! Could easily hear a finished product with some lyrics on the rock radio station.
In my opinion, vocally, the transitions at 48 seconds and 2:12 could use some whispered lyrics. Some of the chorus spots could use some ambient yelling or screams.
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I am sorry that you don't feel like your vocals fit in there just right, I have a tendency to be that way to make things that don't seem just quite right co-exist.
If you insist I will post redo the track without the vocals but I actually do like it, maybe it is a sign of how we tend to be our own biggest critics.
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So pleased to see this message from you.!
Thanks jj,glad your still kickin with it!
cheers for your comments.!
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Always enjoy reading what emotions you feel when you make a song, because this helps in creating lyrics. I have never heard an average track from you Bruno, your work is always the best.
And of course you should feel free to use any of my work on your singings, you have a beautiful voice girl!!!
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