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8th Oct 2016 02:01 - 8 years ago
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Description : First song I've written in quite some time. Let me know what you think, how you think my songwriting could improve, and/or if you'd like to collaborate.

Comments (3)

If you have time take a listen and give AxelStPatience some feedback.

topvega
topvega 11th Oct 2016 01:14 - 8 years ago
Vocals=Good.
Instrumental=Not so good.
You need some instruments that are recorded well and compliment your good voice. Even if you used the same Instrumental and let the notes ring for awhile instead of cutting off it would be a tremendous plus.

Keep at it.

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wikkid
wikkid 9th Oct 2016 01:13 - 8 years ago
I hope you've recorded your vocals and keyboard on separate tracks, because your vocals are killer!

Just a suggestion. I'd love to hear how a Looperman producer would take your vocals and use them for a house/deep house track. You may want to upload a few acapellas or upload acapellas of some of the songs you have here.

Check out what some producers have done with Farisha's acapellas.

Songwriting isn't easy, but the sooner you start, the better you become over time, so be patient. I commend you for putting your work on here, but the strength of this track imho are your vocals. I agree with Wobbin, your voice is beautiful. It's the tone that's arresting and its quite distinct. These days what you've got is a big plus.

Now its time to pair your gift with the right backing music so that you can really shine.
Wobbin
Wobbin 8th Oct 2016 22:00 - 8 years ago
The idea is there. But to be honest: its not more then a voice and an instrument. The instrumental is slightly clipping. Your(?) voice is actually quite beautiful. i am amazed by that! :)

My biggest advice would be to make a full instrumental which suites your voice but that could be the very reason for the collab. I am not sure. Its a bit empty and nude now.

Keep it up man, I feel you!
- Wobbin

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Description : UPDATED 01/03/2023 better volume level
hi guys this is my comeback song, never let them haters beat you.
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21st Jun 2010 01:37 - 14 years ago
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Description : messed around on my piano, came up with a good idea, and put it in fl studio. I think it turned out pretty great. It would be awsome to get some vocals to this. if you do, feel free to change up the title or whatever. tempo is at 105 if ya need to know. review it and enjoy.

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7th Feb 2020 19:28 - 4 years ago
Description : recorded a second verse. the song is available to download but anything other than personal listening contact me
12th Dec 2019 15:11 - 4 years ago
Description : Prod. by Louie Jun and Marbs Music. Diamond Star is the singer. It's on YouTube and SoundCloud. Check out my social media @diamondstarsy.
31st Mar 2018 14:06 - 6 years ago
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Description : My original vocal composition with an array of fantastic looperman samples.
Credits;
Production and Mix - 2nick8
Lyrics and Vocals - 2nick8
Music from Looperman Samples
midnightkayaking-sound-of-walking-away-guitar-2
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simsa105-vigorous-piano
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fanto8bc-liuru-piano-synth
willaman-xxxtentacion-drama-drums #2
krolbeats-lo-fi-drum-loop
angelwtf14-grand-808-slide
mamagbeats-80s-future-synth-90-bpm
yourboyhs-lovely-pads-90-bpm
krolbeats-synth-percussion-loop
josephfunk-fresh-and-clean-electric-keys-90
djole94hns-smooth-bass-for-beats
alabafruit-simple-hip-hop-drums-90-bpm
thenerve-chill-trap-90bpm
dannyhonestly-peezo-pixies
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Description : Endmaster! 15.Aug.2024
So let's try again together!

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SINGER IS LOOKING FOR MUSICAN *smile look it up
acapellas/3992749
or our profile Acapellas
Have fun with it!

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17th Feb 2014 15:44 - 10 years ago
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Description : This one has been sitting on my computer for a bit now but didn't really like it. My friends say it can use some vocals and I think that is what this one needs. If there is anyone who wants to put some vocals on this, send me an email at .magic41151@yahoo.com. or post below. Thanks for tuning in and have a great day!
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Description : powerpop song ... used 2 acapellas from here ...
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Looperman Creators Plz Reach Out !!!

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