"Please don't think that I am dismissing you right of the bat. It's something i will think about."

Not at all, TA. I totally get it. I've got quite a stockpile of tracks that are as "finished" as I was able to get them, but that might or might not benefit from adding something more. I suspect that when, as is your case, you have lyrics for a song, it is more likely that you will have said everything you want to say in the song, and adding more could just detract from it. Most of the tracks I do never get bounced out of Logic. Those that do get bounced I put into a playlist in my iTunes library (not published on iTunes) and I go back and listen to some of them periodically just to see if I'm inspired to tackle them again. So, far, revisiting old tracks is a rarity for me. So, yes, I completely understand your point. I'm just glad you didn't take offence at my comment. Was worried you might misinterpret it as a criticism, rather than a vote of confidence. :)

nice :)

I love this! It's very chill and not all up in your face!

Very nice song. You do really good vocals. Not sure if you actually sound like Jim Morrison, but your voice has a very nice quality and it shows on this track.

There are some things I'd revisit in the arrangement, but I have to say that the modulation to F# minor at 1:23 really took me by surprise and and it was great! I also like the way you built up the track as it progressed, adding more and more to enrich the sound.

My final parting comment on this track is that this is very, very good, but it left me wanting more of a good thing. I think you should seriously consider extending the song and working up additional section(s) with a different chord sequence (i.e., a chorus, perhaps a bridge).

I'm not sure what the sequence should be (I would never have thought of the modulation to F#-) but to maintain interest, it should not repeat the pattern of shifting down and up a major second interval, which is the main sequence found in both the sections of the song now.

EDM can often get by with little variation in chord sequences throughout the entire track. In fact, that's often a key feature of EDM tracks and I guess that's part of what makes them effective for dance music. But, this track of yours is definitely not run-of-the-mill EDM.

Of course, I'm not one to talk. In my tracks, I rarely get past just doing verses. :)

Anyway, this track has so much potential I just had to encourage you to develop it further.

amazing room atmosphere in this! just downloaded. gonna get a remix going soon :)

This has a very raw, live and organic sound and feel. I love acoustic guitar songs, good decision to team up with your friend. I was really enjoying it but when the drums kicked it gave the song such an uplifting feeling to a rather sullen song. Strangely your vocals reminded me of Jim Morrison of the Doors and the song in some ways reminds me of some of their songs so well done on mixing the vox and the how they transition into the more upbeat part.

Well done!

Wayne

brilliant composition TA

the mood you get in your songs are very close to me...little pessimism, downtempo, minor chords, melancholy and a good voice...

hats off and fav of course, Danke

can you allow downloads on this? I like it

This is not bad at all ... lyrics and vocal are great man ... good job !

Peace

Dig that acoustic intro a lot...( a bit of a Southern blues vibe to start with)....the vocal fits to a T....I wanted to stand up and cheer at that little neat key change around 1:22...subtle but most effective...unsure how to describe this one but I gotta say I am absolutely impressed my friend...its got a kind of a folky vibe and is one of those little songs that just seems to wrap itself around your mind and carry you along...something we would all wish to accomplish.....Bravo....big fav from across the water....Ed

Not gonna lie, I was listening to the beginning and I wasn't expecting to hear vocals. But when they came on, they surprised me. In a good way. Just like the piano transition. That really is a beautiful addition to this piece. It took me thru a range of emotions in such a short time span. Which I like. Keep up the good work. Sounds good on my monitors. I can tell you're in an open room recording, or you have a heavy room reverb. Peace & Blessings.