You have a nice melody and I like that little vocal sample you studder, what you should do is continue to studder until it fades out and bring in reverb as it goes.

You always talk about getting famous, so I'm going to go over track structure of trance that is going to be a necessity if you ever want to release something. I don't really know the structure of trance songs, but more energetic trance is pretty similar to hardcore, trance with less energy may have a different thing going on. When you release your song your going to release it for a DJ's, not just for listeners, the DJ has to be able to mix it into his set. So you need an intro that has a bass drum so they can beatmatch from the other song. You progressively add drum and bass into the mix every 8 to 16 bars in the intro. You may even bring in the melody for a bit. Then a breakdown, in trance its probably going to be something mellow, and smooth, an orchestra and a choir, they may be related to the melody in a way, some ambient synth, or vocals are often common if you have them. Next you start building for a chorus, then you have the chorus, which usually is a minimum of 24 bars. You keep the drums/bass going for 16-24 bars and maybe add or subtract elements from the beat. Then have another breakdown, build, chorus, then slowly detract elements from the mix.

This could be completely wrong, but it should help.

-DaMann

Low-energy Trance. Not bad. Seems like you might have a couple of different pieces mixed into one though. Changes tenor a little abruptly in the middle. A little choppy overall but the essence of a good trance piece is there.

nice, slow and smooth. The drums are very good, silenced i the background, without noticing when they stops. Good work :)