Orihime

your voice does'nt sound that bad tho the timing and quality of recording is off... i think with a bit of guidence and training in how to project yourself and a sound engineer to bring out the best of your voice and delivery, you could improve greatly, you've got some good ideas there and with maturity you will evolve, jus keep practicing and try to find a mentor

Sounds like something from an anime. The megamix/medley of instruments kept me listening. Twisted indeed

I really don't know what else to say about this? Indescribable
Blake

Cant say anything bad about this one seeing that I'm unfamiliar with the weird genre. Its definitely a collage of musical expressions.

Made me smile
:-p

If your song, was at the same rate as the backing then it would sound better, its just timing I guess.

I think it made me want to cry... don't know why. painful - good art.

I can tell that you attempted very much so with the composition of this song.

The message is a bit distorted through the many things that are happening every second

A suggestion would be to have a steady flow with the music and make the transitions a bit more fluent.

And also, when using loops, make sure that they don't sound to choppy, or end abruptly, they end up ruining the essence of transitions.

Lastly, I feel that you were trying to find many loops to go with what you are trying to convey to the listeners, In my opinion you should do the opposite. I would recommend Creating a solid instrumental track, then shape your lyric timing over them. That way it wont be so difficult for you to try and savage loops to fit the tempo/style of your voice.

On a lighter note, I can honestly see the amount of time and effort that you put into this track, but like anything, there is always room for improvement.

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-Bri

your tracks are so wacky! lol im liking it! you must make loads more!

However at what price?.....I wouldn't want to be like Paris Hilton for example....Ok back to the song..first off it's very interesting..there are some things that maybe need to be addressed..some things work and some things don't (In my opinion)...the tempo of the song has a problem in two areas..one. your freestyling with your lyrics(which is cool) but when a new sample is introduced your jumping to sync with it,which makes for a stuttered delivery..two..some of the samples chop and change without allowing any reflection of what has come before...I really like the more classical piano part as it suits your voice..one way to go would maybe get your lyrics down first to a click track or something then add the music later...it's all a juggling act I know but it will help with the final arrangement...mind you in music anything goes and the creative aspect and decisions are for the artist alone...I can imagine that your music in this style would closely parallel Bjork maybe......just my two cents,anyway it's clear your musical expression is going places...that's super cool! don't ever stop..........cheers planet :)

but really cool!
kinda like kate bush on some really good acid.
nice work, keep it comin'

Lyrics kind of remind me of that one Linkin Park song (if they are, my bad. I'm not the biggest LP fan).

The music fits with the style of the vocals, but the recording quality really sets it back. And I think you need to work on your tone a bit more. For the most part, it was good, but some parts were too flat, or too sharp.

Work out these few rough spots and I think you've got a good tune.

This is gonna be a really good song once it goes through it's full evolution.

Good voice and instrum melody lines. Just smooth out the mix and add percussion. The percussion will help the whole song come together.

i saw death note and had to check it out. i love the apple loops they, never get old.

I thought the vocals were a little out of time....I dont know whether that was the intention, but it came across as they were being rushed? The track itself was quite good with nice beats and fx.
With a bit of polish this would be great
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